Thursday, 15 May 2014

JIM HAMTARO LAS VEGAS ELVIS PRESLEY BUDDHISM

 JIM                HAMTARO                LAS VEGAS              ELVIS PRESLEY                    BUDDHISM


I was hi in the sky staring into the clouds.I could see the sun going down into the hills. i was flying to
Las Vegas. i had been saving up for five years to see one of Elvis Presley performance .I've seen the adds and everyone loves him.

3 comments:

  1. that is random.were did you get those words from???????????????????????????

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    1. Hi Ollie,
      Remember to use the commenting criteria - What did you like? What would you like to see next time.

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  2. Hi Louis
    You've got some powerful imagery going on in your werewolf posts! Take some time this week to polish them up. Have a look at them again and think about what you might want to recraft. There are some surface (mainly punctuation) things that need to be fixed up. You also seem to end up in the snow very quickly so you could add some more details so we know how we got there.
    It's great to read you writing. Im looking forward to reading more!

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